Well done, Laura! I enjoyed this and there were moments when I really 'felt it'. Now - I think you need to be prepared to record this lots more times, because it's like the final master track will be sewn together from all the best bits of many versions. So, I think you need to make friends with the sound recording studio and just come and go until you've got a collection of recordings.
That said, now you've got this version, you can begin to visualise everything as an animatic. I notice that you've cut out a lot of the gaps between the various sections of your talk. I think you need to think about putting some of those pauses back into the timeline so it sounds a bit more natural and less accelerated in places. Brave stuff, Laura - I think this is good strong potent stuff, so well done for getting in there and getting this first recording down. Now... importantly, remember the power of animation; you don't have to picture everything visually in a literal way, and you don't have to just draw what we're being told: for example, the station description; it needs to convey the speed and the bustle and the panic, but you can do that by getting a bit abstract and a bit free and easy. I'm just going to leave a few examples here to inspire you - particularly as you think about how you might transition from one bit to the next (i.e. you can just 'do stuff' and show stuff) and also how you can use 'white space' spatially and interestingly...
Well done, Laura! I enjoyed this and there were moments when I really 'felt it'. Now - I think you need to be prepared to record this lots more times, because it's like the final master track will be sewn together from all the best bits of many versions. So, I think you need to make friends with the sound recording studio and just come and go until you've got a collection of recordings.
ReplyDeleteThat said, now you've got this version, you can begin to visualise everything as an animatic. I notice that you've cut out a lot of the gaps between the various sections of your talk. I think you need to think about putting some of those pauses back into the timeline so it sounds a bit more natural and less accelerated in places. Brave stuff, Laura - I think this is good strong potent stuff, so well done for getting in there and getting this first recording down. Now... importantly, remember the power of animation; you don't have to picture everything visually in a literal way, and you don't have to just draw what we're being told: for example, the station description; it needs to convey the speed and the bustle and the panic, but you can do that by getting a bit abstract and a bit free and easy. I'm just going to leave a few examples here to inspire you - particularly as you think about how you might transition from one bit to the next (i.e. you can just 'do stuff' and show stuff) and also how you can use 'white space' spatially and interestingly...
https://vimeo.com/20793651
https://www.youtube.com/watch?annotation_id=annotation_882362031&feature=iv&src_vid=8PUW2POEjX4&v=KvtgqJTVVhE
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MrPDOSSXHDo
thank you Phil for the feedback and ill take a look to help me with the animatic
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