Hello, Phil, I have done my first script draft for my mitosis superhero idea and I need advice on how is at the moment and if it needs improvement, hope it is really good.
Hi Laura - just a quick observation: I've read your script and it kind of suggests that the body has a 'special cell' that does a 'special job' of dividing, when really the message is that all cells do this amazing job. Your script - in this way - is a bit misleading I think and might confuse people - the idea of 'hero cell'. I think you need to think about re-tuning your script a bit to make the point that 'all cells are heroes' because of this job they do. What do you think?
Hi Laura - can you send your script as .doc file? Cheers.
ReplyDeleteOk Phil i sent it to you :)
DeleteHi Laura - just a quick observation: I've read your script and it kind of suggests that the body has a 'special cell' that does a 'special job' of dividing, when really the message is that all cells do this amazing job. Your script - in this way - is a bit misleading I think and might confuse people - the idea of 'hero cell'. I think you need to think about re-tuning your script a bit to make the point that 'all cells are heroes' because of this job they do. What do you think?
ReplyDeleteI think so, I gotten a bit too focused on 1 cell then all of them. Ill go back and fix that
Deletecould you help me make with this problem please
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